Week #3 100 Word Challenge

It was the first day of school and Rebecca was so nervous. Like always mom came in and said get up its time to go to school. So Rebecca slowly got out of bed and went downstairs. All of a sudden Rebecca fainted and woke up back in her bed. She tried again but it seemed to be going backwards. Mom came in again and said get ups time to go to school it was so weird!!!!! Rebecca had to get to school or she was going to be late. So Rebecca hurried as quick as possible finally Rebecca  got to to school and everything was over.

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  1. HillcrestBlog33 October 2018 at 13:12

    Hello Yoshiwoshi,
    What an interesting use of the prompt! Remember that the focus of today's lesson was to avoid repeating words in such a short piece of writing e.g. 'so' and 'school'. Instead of, "Rebecca had to get to school... Why not write, "Rebecca had to get going or she would be late"? Also, using more than one exclamation mark at the end of a sentence is often seen in social media, but proper use of the exclamation mark is to only use one per sentence. Keep on writing and learning.
    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Van

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