100 Word Challenge Week # 13

It was the night before Christmas and Bella and Sam were so excited. Their friends wanted to have a sleepover and suprisingly their parents said yes. They all played, hung out and watched movies. Bella and Sam's friends named Jerry and Jim said lets go to the park "but they were exhausted". So instead they went to bed. When they woke up there were so many presents under the tree. Bella and Sam were so happy. Jerry and Jim went home and they all said they had the most magnificent christmas ever and they were thankful for everything.

Comments

  1. I like how you wrote about Christmas and I really like your story, but remember to capitalized "Christmas".

    ReplyDelete
  2. I really enjoy how you put a word like magnificent instead of good and everything either names or starts of sentences are all capitalized

    ReplyDelete
  3. I love how your story is related to christmas and your story had lot's of detail. However you repeated some words more than 2 times, and you also forgot to highlight our main sentence but it was a very detailed story.

    ReplyDelete
  4. I think your story was lovely. l liked how you related it to christmas. Next time you should write hanged out instead hung out . good job.

    ReplyDelete

Post a Comment

Popular posts from this blog

Week #3 100 Word Challenge